I spent last time talking about a manuscript full of stupid mistakes that didn’t work. This time, I’m going to talk about some where it does. Because in real life, people forget critical information, give in to impulses that turn out to be a Really Bad Idea, and generally do things that, if they’d stopped to consider, are clearly likely to have a less-than-good outcome. If characters never did this kind of thing, they’d be unrealistically perfect (and quite possibly boring as well).

On the other hand, characters who make mistake after mistake, or whose mistakes conveniently occur whenever the plot needs a boost or twist, are equally unrealistic, and seldom work except in the sort of parody where the whole point is that they can never do anything right. Similarly, if the characters never face any consequences from their mistakes, or never appear to learn anything from those consequences, the story is unlikely to feel real or be satisfying.

So how do authors strike a balance between too-perfect characters who never make a mistake and unrealistically stupid characters?

First off, mistakes in a story work like coincidences, meaning that the bigger the mistake or coincidence, the fewer of them are likely to work in a story. A tale that opens with an enormous, life-changing mistake implicitly promises the reader that the rest of the story is going to deal mainly with the consequences of that mistake. That means that the author can’t use a second enormous life-changing act of stupidity in mid-book in order to change course; whatever happens has to flow in some way from that original giant error. If other characters make mistakes, it’s most likely to work if a) they’re small mistakes, b) they’re very different from the original giant error, and c) they don’t result in a major plot event or twist, but just push the story along in whatever direction it’s currently going.

If, however, the story doesn’t include one single, enormous mistake, the author can often get away with having two large-but-not-enormous mistakes, or three or four small errors of judgement, etc. One ought not to get too carried away by this, of course; there’s a point where one hits “too many” even if they’re all eensy-weensy errors.

Back to the large mistake thing. Once I started thinking about it, I could think of three or four novels that open with a ginormous mistake on the part of the major character, and they generally follow the same pattern. First off, the big mistake doesn’t occur on page 1; it’s usually near the end of the first or second chapter. This gives the author plenty of time to lead up to it…and they do.

In every case I could think of, the events leading up to the mistake are shown carefully and in sufficient detail to make it clear to the reader why the character made the mistake…and each of them has several points at which they could have backed out and changed direction. The characters hesitate briefly, but pride or inertia or drunken bloody-mindedness keeps them on track for the inevitable train wreck at the end of the first chapter.

As a result, the reader can see that the characters are being stupid, but they can also see and understand why they’re being stupid. For this one, it was a combination of being angry, drunk, and too proud to back down once he realized he’d dug himself into a hole; for that one, it was a combination of hubris and fear; for the other one, it was midlife insecurity combined with temptation and needing to prove something to himself. The reader can see and sympathize with the character, maybe even think “There but for the grace of God go I,” even as she’s shaking her head about the dumb decision itself. Yes, the decision is still dumb, but we believe that this character, under these circumstances, really would do it.

It is, admittedly, extremely difficult to do this kind of thing for mistakes that various characters made before the story even began. One can, however, show that they regret the mistake, and that they’ve learned something from having messed up so badly five or ten or twenty years before…and one can certainly arrange for them not to repeat the same mistake. A character doing the exact same stupid thing for a second time tends to really put readers off, even if the first time happened twenty years pre-story and we didn’t get to watch it.

If the pre-story mistake really is vital to the current plot, one can use flashback to show the circumstances and motivation, or one can have some really understanding other character explain it to everyone in the present story who doesn’t know.

In every case, though, it all keeps coming back around to making sure the reader understands the reasons the character made the mistake…and the bigger the mistake is, the more time the writer probably needs to spend setting it up. “Um, sorry, officer, I left my driver’s license at home” needs maybe half a line earlier about how fast she flew out of the house; “Er, I sort of told the Evil Overlord where our Sekrit Base is” needs a lot more advance justification.

About the only time this isn’t true is when one has a central character who is supposed to be an idiot – Bertie Wooster, say – and the whole point of the story is watching him bumble into trouble and watch Jeeves pull him out again. Which works in comedy, but seldom in drama.

7 Comments
  1. I’ve just translated a novel in which the protagonist – hungry, exhausted, full of adrenaline – does something stupid that ultimately leads to her being caught, but at that point you believe that she’s at the end of her tether and in a way wants to go out with a bang rather than a whimper. She makes mistakes, yes, but she’s also trying to think logically… only she doesn’t have enough information and processing power (and a very intelligent opponent). But the reaction is more ‘oh noes [wants to hug character]’ than ‘no, you stupid thing.’

  2. The book I’m working on now has a big life altering mistake at the end of chapter two – so I’m hopefully doing something right 🙂 My character spends the rest of the book trying to right the wrong, and is given an opportunity later to prove she wouldn’t make the same mistake twice. I think characters can’t be flawless, but I agree that there is a limit to how much stupidity I am willing to take.

  3. This is exactly what I need to be thinking about right now, because I’m at the point where both of my major POV characters do something incredibly stupid, one stupid act triggering the next, and I’m terrified it won’t work. So terrified that I’ve been blocked in writing it for a couple of weeks. But it’s supposed to be an important act of stupidity – for char 2 – but reading this made me realize that char 1’s mistake needs to be just as important and true to her character. She wants so badly to have family that she chooses the mother who thinks of her as a failed science experiment over her one loyal friend, and her friend, finally rejected by everyone who matters to her, runs without thinking into danger and nearly dies. But I’m not sure if I’ve managed to thread the motivations into the narrative enough to make the mistakes not make the characters seem TSTL.

  4. This is one of the reasons I love your books – I never find myself screaming at characters not to do stupid things.
    And since this is my first time posting, I would like to thank you for writing such wonderful books. They are some of the best books I have ever read.

  5. Coincidences and stupidity, in my experience, work best near the beginning. Then the story is about how to deal with the consequences, not how the story in progress was wrenched off course by either.

    (Then, I don’t like bone-headed stupidity. Which is a pet peeve of mine, since I don’t like even when it’s obviously justified and just what the character would do.)

  6. This is one of the fun things about writing: you risk being criticised most strongly when you stick closest to reality. Everybody knows at least one person who does exactly the things Ms Wrede has been talking about, but drawing them from life for a story almost never works.

    It’s not just stupid characters, either. David Drake has mentioned being criticised for depicting events when ‘real people just don’t do things like that!’ Usually, when that happens he’s quoting verbatim from history, and if you ask him he can point to similar happenings from several other periods, as well.

  7. The sequel to SWALLOWS & AMAZONS, SWALLOWDALE, begins with a well set up mistake — John damaging the sailboat — and ends when its repair is complete. The set up to John’s mistake focuses on his mood, the delays that made him so impatient that he took a risk, etc. The book’s main action is about what the children did that summer instead of sailing, but it keeps checking in on stages of John’s regret, adults comforting him with ‘Everyone makes mistakes, we just usually luck out’, etc.