Practically every how-to-write book I’ve ever read (and I have read quite a few) breaks down “writing fiction” into a bunch of different areas – plot, characterization, structure, dialog, theme, etc. – and then examines each area separately, usually at the level of sentences or paragraphs. This misses two significant factors: first, that everything in writing has both a micro-level, sentence-by-sentence and paragraph-by-paragraph effect, and a macro-level overall effect, and everything really needs to work on both levels rather than only on one, and second, that all these bits and pieces and levels have to work together to form a pleasing and balanced whole.
Take dialog, for instance. There are lots of micro-level things that are important – giving each character his/her own speech pattern and voice, for instance, or polishing particular characters’ witty repartee. Recently, though, I read a novel where there was no dialog but witty repartee; nobody ever said anything as simple witty repartee; nobody ever said anything as simple as “Pass the coffee” without adding some clever comment, which was immediately topped by whoever happened to have the coffee pot. As individual conversations, they sparkled, but as an entire novel, it got really wearing. Even Oscar Wilde includes lines that are, in themselves, pedestrian (“Where have you been since last Thursday?” “In the country.” “What on earth do you do there?”) but that set up for the next clever line (“When one is in town one amuses oneself. When one is in the country one amuses other people.”)
People focus on the micro level mainly because it is where writing starts. It is fundamental. Nobody sits down and *blooph* there’s a chapter; even if they are very, very clear on everything that happens in the chapter, they still type it in one letter, one word, one sentence, one paragraph at a time. The macro levels are built up from stacks and stacks of micro levels, the way a wall is built from stacks and stacks of bricks. The assumption is that if you get the little stuff right, the bigger levels will take care of themselves.
Unfortunately, it doesn’t always work this way, because what is needed to make things work in the overall story, at the book level, are not always things that are obvious when all one ever looks at is the micro level. Like the book full of witty repartee, in which no one could explain a simple plot point without three pages of back-and-forth snarking, things that work one scene or paragraph at a time may not work when you string a bunch of scenes or paragraphs together.
Another example: a while back, I read a Romance novel that was curiously flat. The prose was quite readable; the characters were likeable; the dialog was realistic and varied; the characters encountered an appropriate number of obstacles on their way to the altar.
The trouble, when I got to analyzing it, was that there was very little tension, and the reason there was very little tension was that every time an obstacle cropped up, the couple dealt with it completely. On a scene-by-scene basis, this worked fine, but dealing so completely with each and every obstacle left the overall story with no development. The characters started out at emotional level 1, got up to level 3 due to an obstacle, and then dropped back to level 1 when they dealt with the obstacle. So every time they hit a new problem, they were starting from the same emotional point…and there is a limit to how much an author can crank up the tension/emotional level in one problem-solution cycle.
In other words, the author had been paying attention to the scenes and making sure that the loose ends from each plot-incident were tied off, but they’d lost sight of the effect that such a complete wrap-up of each incident ended up having on the story as a whole.
The tricky bit with the macro level is that for a lot of aspects of a story, it is difficult to see until you have the whole thing there to look at. Plot is commonly seen as an exception to this, but that’s only true for writers who plan their plot in advance and stick to their plan. For the rest of us, the overall shape of the plot is something that needs to be looked at when it is all there, and it isn’t all there until the book is finished.
Plot is a bit easier to examine on the macro level than some other things (dialog, theme, characterization, worldbuilding), mainly because part of marketing a novel is producing a plot outline, which forces the writer to condense the plot line into five to ten pages and then to examine those pages to be sure they make sense. For things like characterization and dialog and pacing and so on, there isn’t a built-in marketing tool that makes the writer examine things at a macro level whether they want to or not.
This means the writer has to find some other way of checking whether everything works on the macro level, and whether it all works together. This is one of the reasons so many writing books advise writers to let their work “cool off” for a few weeks or months once it’s finished, and then try to read it as if they’ve never seen it before. This can be really useful, as long as the writer doesn’t get bogged down in fixing the micro-level writing (which happens far too frequently), and as long as the writer doesn’t have too many personal blind spots for macro-level problems (a writer who really doesn’t much care about increasing tension/emotion is unlikely to spot the fact that his/her novel is emotionally flat, just as one who is only interested in the characters’ emotional angst is unlikely to spot problems with balance in exposition or worldbuilding).
Beta-readers can be a useful shortcut for spotting macro-level problems, if you a) can find good, reliable betas, and b) are the sort of writer who is OK with showing your not-completely-finished-and-polished work to other people. If you can’t and you aren’t, you will have to go the slower route of teaching yourself to look at all the aspects of fiction on the macro level when the work is finished.
I recently read a book where the snarky tone was amusing in small doses, but began to tire me out the further I read. Each book needs its high points, and if everything is snarky, then those witty thoughts don’t stand out among all the others. In order for a high point to shine through, there needs to be regular and low points as well.
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One piece of advice I give aspiring critiquers of other people’s story is to start with the macro and work your way down.
If only because by the time the writer tears apart the story to deal with the plot and character problems you enumerated, he’s probably eliminated all the micro-problems that you pointed out. Introduced more in the process no doubt, but eliminated those.
Except for pervasive problems. “All your talk is witty banter, which makes it dull; there’s no contrast” would certainly be a pervasive problem.
As a budding writer, I keep coming back to this. Each chapter I write, I make sure it all makes sense, but I keep asking myself, “Does the character know this? Does the reader need to know the truth or should I make them wonder, or let them assume?”
It’s tough, and I’m hoping to get a better sense of my own novel once I’ve got it all down, and I’ll be keeping this(and other posts of yours) in mind. Thank you for the thought provoking post. 🙂
Another important aspect of it is to revise your work at least once at a canter. If you re-read the whole thing in a few days you get a better idea why the parts don’t fit together because you have them all fresh at once.
Being responsible for all the levels is the mark of a mature writer, who can SEE all the levels, and focus on the one that needs attention RIGHT NOW.
Back and forth, from the overall plan to writing a two-paragraph section that moves the plot a tiny bit back before a big leap forward.
When my brain isn’t working right (I have CFS and it’s called ‘brain fog’), the levels tend to get mixed up on me, and all the bits and pieces I write into my Notes file don’t come out in order.
I have to do a fair amount of literal cut and paste to assemble into piles the bits that go into a part of a scene, and must, somehow, fit together (and the duplicates or almost-duplicates weeded out).
It’s faster now that I have all those pieces also stored in a computer file: once I mark up the paper, and decide where thoughts or paragraphs should go, I don’t have to retype, but my biggest problem is still getting all the levels all bolloxed up into a mess.
I’m getting used to it: after the sorting hat does its job, and the internal editor gets a turn, and the polishing happens, I am ALWAYS happier with the results.
Your post clarified my thoughts – thanks.
Alicia